Good news: I don't think I'll ever have a worse draft in my future than this. http://arenamastery.com/2Cus
Bad news: If you play enough, you probably will
There are a few small things I might have done differently, but the bigger ones are:
5. Croc > Healer. Healer is an okay card, but it's below average and you already have one. There are quite a few really good 5-drops and you don't want so many total. The more Healers you take now, the less Mercenaries, Warlords, Silver Hand Knights, Commandos, and Tigers you can take later. Croc is really not that bad. I've seen lists where people (Trump) rank it really low, but it trades evenly with Raptors, which is mostly what you plan on doing with your 2-drop. It's important to have enough 2-drops.
14. Intellect > Novice. blueblump covered this
19. At this point, you might need to start worrying about curve. You already have 7/18 cards at 5+, plus an pure draw card. You need the small stuff more than you need another 5-drop, even as good as Silver Hand Knight.
24. Now you
really need the Apprentice more than the Mercenary.
25. Ancient Brewmaster is a good card. I'm not sure if you're now panicking about curve, but Argent Squire is pretty bad without a bunch of buffs.